Reclining outside
pillow underneath our heads
spotting cloud designs.
Shattered solitude.
A hammock meant for just one
overflows with two.
Wind gently swaying,
softly rocking our striped perch.
Look! There’s a dragon.
At night under the stars
we spy satellites crossing
paths with meteors.
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pillow underneath our heads
spotting cloud designs.
Shattered solitude.
A hammock meant for just one
overflows with two.
Wind gently swaying,
softly rocking our striped perch.
Look! There’s a dragon.
At night under the stars
we spy satellites crossing
paths with meteors.
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13 comments:
Ah, that made me miss summertime.
Wow, you are SO good at this Patois. Sincerely. Makes me miss summertime just a bit too.
Beautiful.
Lovely series.
Amazing....wonderful offerings. So vivid, so zen.
These all brought such vivid pictures to my mind, especially the last one. We used to have a hammock... maybe it is time to acquire another. Thank you.
that's perfect. i love me some hammock time. ;-D
Love your Haiku! Wish I could write stuff like that but my mind just doesn't operate on those wave lengths other than to read and appreciate them. My son though - now he likes and can write haiku -but it's a struggle to get him to do things like that now days.
I love shattered solitude.
Wow! This is GREAT!!!
You are very talented, me lady!
I love the second one the most. But they are all so wonderful!!!
these sound like fantastic times with children...we love to lie on the dock & search for satellites!
I like the last paragraph... reminded me a little bit of e.e. cummings. :D
The second poem is fantastic. The physical situation and emotion are well contained together. There is also a subtle irony here... I have the feeling that the strict haiku format constrained the way you wrote the poem (with maybe a few too many words? not a criticism)... which reflects the content of the poem.
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