Thursday, November 29, 2007

Haiku: Boulders, Rocks, Stones and Pebbles

Quite the different prompt this week from One Deep Breath. My first thought? My youngest, whom we often call "Rock Boy" because of his inner need for rocks. I'd call him a collector, but I don't know that gravel and the like is something to keep in a chest.

Pockets filled with gray
treasures gathered in secret.
Clanking reveals stash.


Ones which cannot fit
can still be conquered by lad.
He’s king of the hill.

15 comments:

Sandy Carlson said...

Marvelous. My daughter also has a passion for rocks. I found her collection recently in a big box in the basement. She wouldn't part with them. I wonder what that's about.

Lovely image of your child moving mountains.

Wonders said...

Nice...

pjd said...

Lovely, though initially I read the first line as "pockets filled with gravy" and thought, I'm glad by boys don't do that...

winslow1204 said...

Great Haiku!

SusieJ said...

I love that he's king of the hill.

Pearl said...

Like the clank of boy's treasure. :)

Glad said...

Really appreciate how the specific word from the prompt is eluded to in both haiku. "Pockets filled with gray" "treasures gathered in secret" "Ones which cannot fit" Fantastic!

quietpaths said...

I simply love the innocence expressed in these poems. This is a great line: "clanking reveals stash". That says it.

Barone said...

Wonderful...I hear the clanking. My youngest finds "crystals", rocks with sparkle or granite, and feels she has found gold. We have made a rock garden out of all of her finds. Be well and regards to king of the hill.

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Jeni said...

That was neat -recognizes his penchant, gives it credence there in a nice, friendly -also loving way.

Maria said...

Oh, I LOVED this one...

Great imagery.

Bren said...

Oh my God, my little guy has a pile of them too. If I'm not careful, I end up with them in the wash.

Toni said...

I think this is wonderful to acknowledge your son's passion this way; when he is older he will appreciate that you noticed!

Laura McIntyre said...

Wonderful, i think my youngest may end up loving rocks. At her grans there are a pile she loves to chew on - i wonder if the cool smooth surface feels good on her gums?

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