Tuesday, February 12, 2008

Haiku: Love

Technically, this isn't a 'ku. It's a tanka. And it is my first attempt at such. It's done with the prompt from One Deep Breath, home of some of the finest haiga, haiku and tanka writers I've ever read.


Fashionably late,
you arrived to great fanfare,
offering only
yourself. Such a small being
to make such a huge impact.



This, however, is a 'ku. That very late little baby is now 11 years old, and his teeth, which we chronicled the eruption of just an instant ago, fall to the wayside.


Another pearl falls
from your mouth, chipping my heart
as you grow too fast.

Toothsome Lad

17 comments:

Queeny said...

I don't know a lot about poetry, so "TANKA" very much for culturizing me.

Cute pic.

qualcosa di bello said...

isn't that the way with children!? they come powerfully, envelop us in love & take our hearts with them!

tumblewords said...

Ah, such a great love...handsome boy!

Sandy Carlson said...

These are lovely gifts to your beautiful child. Wonderful!
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Sian said...

Tiny things changing our world, chipping our hearts. You summed it right up. Just lovely.

watermaid said...

I too had a tiny baby who made a big impact - she now a little woman.

Love the teeth 'ku - the 'pearl...chipping my heart' - great image.

MamaGeek said...

Hey, I've missed you P. Still reading you daily and sincerely impressed with your talent.

Your son is so handsome. Beautiful ku to match.

spacedlaw said...

Nice tanka! And indeed children grow too quickly.

The Literary Prostitute said...

You should be very proud of your boy, and of your poetry. I really admire people who can say what they mean so succinctly--I sure can't!

LittleWing said...

our children our treasure... beautiful tanka and enjoyable ku...

Maria said...

Such a Peter Pan smile he has...

Krissie said...

Thank 'ku' for the lovely words. yes a mother watches he rchild grow is love indeed.

moe lauher said...

Thank you for sharing with us.

Crafty Green Poet said...

Good tanka and ku!

Sarcastic Mom (aka Lotus) said...

Aw. I those days will come far too fast.

I was going to comment on your Caught Green Handed post - love the idea. But I can't figure out how... there's no link for comments? *scratches head*

Andrée said...

Those are wonderful. I admire the way you wrote them very much (I am still learning and didn't even write this week's!). http://meeyauw-pad.blogspot.com/2008/02/one-deep-breath-found-in-wandering.html

D... said...

Sniff, they truly do grow up so fast. I really enjoyed your tanka & 'ku.

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