I envision the
shock paving the way toward
bitter loneliness.
A once vibrant man
shattered by his own making.
Patriarch undone.
shock paving the way toward
bitter loneliness.
A once vibrant man
shattered by his own making.
Patriarch undone.
[One Single Impression poets speak of being "stranded" this week.]






20 comments:
"Patriarch undone" gets me right in the heart. It's a hard thing to see and to experience. Thanks for these.
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sad and to the point, it's hard to imagine one's own father becoming someone else
This is poignant and beautiful and full of love.
Yes, "Patriarch undone" really got me too. Tis my Dad, only not divorce, but paralysis.
My I share it on my blog and link it back to you?
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I read these first without noticing your comments at the beginning. Still, the story came through clearly. Very painful and beautiful both.
Wow, this is a powerful piece. So much told in so few words. Bravo.
Ah, the depth of these brings a tear - nicely done - very visual.
oh wow. you're words always astound me. very nicely done. *patriarch undone* love it, even as painful as it is.
i've recently been discussing with the hubs how art not only allows us to transcend ourselves and fly to the moon with our dreams, but it also allows us to break open deep secrets and unpleasantness sometimes forgotten or pushed aside. beauty is found in both.
very painful and very lovely.
Also, hits very close to home, as my own father has been/ is going through something very similar.I feel your pain.
..strange stuff pain,
may be explained,could be understood,but only and singularly the sufferer
feels it..
This is so heart wrenching. I have known so many who have been there. 'Patriach undone' very impacting. Wonderful poem.
Wonderful haiku commemorating a terrible time in your life. You are brave. :)
So. This ku actually put a lump in my throat. So powerful, so passionate, so beautiful P.
a few words with a whole canyon of loneliness...
"shattered by his own making" stopped me in my tracks. I see it so often, I see it happening around me. How can lives go so wrong?
Deep and such moving words.
That was absolutely lovely. And so poignant and sad.
That last line certainly captures a sense of identity unravelled.
A moving write.
Gemma
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