Tuesday, April 8, 2008

Haiku: Stranded

These were not easy ones for me to write. I imagine they're not particularly easy ones for my family to read. My parents separated and then divorced when I was 15. My father went over the edge when it happened. When he died a decade later, he was still bereft of the life he had lost.

I envision the
shock paving the way toward
bitter loneliness.

A once vibrant man
shattered by his own making.
Patriarch undone.

[One Single Impression poets speak of being "stranded" this week.]

20 comments:

SandyCarlson said...

"Patriarch undone" gets me right in the heart. It's a hard thing to see and to experience. Thanks for these.
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lissa said...

sad and to the point, it's hard to imagine one's own father becoming someone else

Raven said...

This is poignant and beautiful and full of love.

:: Suzanne :: said...

Yes, "Patriarch undone" really got me too. Tis my Dad, only not divorce, but paralysis.

My I share it on my blog and link it back to you?

:: Suzanne :: said...

May

Quiet Paths said...

I read these first without noticing your comments at the beginning. Still, the story came through clearly. Very painful and beautiful both.

Pam said...

Wow, this is a powerful piece. So much told in so few words. Bravo.

tumblewords said...

Ah, the depth of these brings a tear - nicely done - very visual.

jenica said...

oh wow. you're words always astound me. very nicely done. *patriarch undone* love it, even as painful as it is.

i've recently been discussing with the hubs how art not only allows us to transcend ourselves and fly to the moon with our dreams, but it also allows us to break open deep secrets and unpleasantness sometimes forgotten or pushed aside. beauty is found in both.

Rivergirl said...

very painful and very lovely.

Rivergirl said...

Also, hits very close to home, as my own father has been/ is going through something very similar.I feel your pain.

zoya gautam said...

..strange stuff pain,
may be explained,could be understood,but only and singularly the sufferer
feels it..

MyBellavia said...

This is so heart wrenching. I have known so many who have been there. 'Patriach undone' very impacting. Wonderful poem.

the teach said...

Wonderful haiku commemorating a terrible time in your life. You are brave. :)

MamaGeek said...

So. This ku actually put a lump in my throat. So powerful, so passionate, so beautiful P.

qualcosa di bello said...

a few words with a whole canyon of loneliness...

andrée said...

"shattered by his own making" stopped me in my tracks. I see it so often, I see it happening around me. How can lives go so wrong?

Teri C said...

Deep and such moving words.

Maria said...

That was absolutely lovely. And so poignant and sad.

Greyscale Territory said...

That last line certainly captures a sense of identity unravelled.

A moving write.

Gemma

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