Monday, May 19, 2008

Haiku: Bleeding

I saw the prompt for One Single Impression this morning and my thoughts toyed with the word, sometimes whimsically and sometimes tragically. In the end, the whimsical thoughts were easily trumped by the tragic. Without further ado:

Age hardens once young
views with plaque, slowly blocking
my sympathetic heart

17 comments:

SandyCarlson said...

I sure do know the feeling! What's the cure?
Thanks for this poem. I love what you do.
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gardenpath said...

Yes, it sure does to some people. I like this.

Greyscale Territory said...

Age can be a special kind of hardening - where trials may not weigh as heavy or seem quite so emotionally dramatic/draining. Is that always a bad thing or a good thing?

Gemma

gautami tripathy said...

Sigh. It has started..

ravages of time

Vixen said...

That is really well done. Kudos.

the teach said...

Love the haiku! It's happening to all of us... thanks for commenting on mine!

one more believer said...

excellent portrayal of hardened hearts spoken so beautifully

Raven said...

Beautiful. Except, I think your sympathetic heart is quite intact or you couldn't have written it. Still, I know what you mean. Maybe the plaque of age doesn't so much harden as cushion our hearts.

andrée said...

I agree with Raven that this is not you. But I personally know a person for whom it was true and it is tragic. She died bitter and alone.

zoya gautam said...

..this is a search for compassion,for tenderness,a/(any) heart with sympathy probes..many thanks for the perspective..

MamaGeek said...

Oh Lordie you are talented with words P. You nailed this, age does harden people. Well, some people.

MyBellavia said...

This is so true! Excellent take.

WillThink4Wine said...

I'm feel blessed to say that this is not true of me, because my heart has opened up more and more as I age, and I am more apt to feel compassion and forgiveness. I do know a few that have hardened their hearts, however.

Genny said...

You write really powerful Haiku.

Quiet Paths said...

This piece certainly sparked much discussion, which would be a marker of success, I'd say. It's always a dance between those two elements - heart and experience.

Kelly O said...

A little tragic with a hint of whimsy. Nice!

storyteller said...

Poignant reflection of ‘what is’ … remembering ‘what was’ …

It took me a while but I managed to come up with an idea and posted this morning at Sacred Ruminations.
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