Sunday, October 11, 2009

Sunday Scribblings: Bump in the Night

She would be damned if she couldn't protect the weak, the defenseless, and the helpless. She was certainly none of those. And she could out-ride, out-hunt and out-fight all but the toughest of the men.

By virtue of being a woman, she was forbidden to become one of them. Her twin brother Charles had been raised knowing he would one day join their ranks. From practically the age of birth, he had been groomed to grow into the role. She was able to train with him only because their father was gone far too often to put an end to it.

Their father died in battle at virtually the same time Charles succumbed to the most recent outbreak of the plague. Only she remained, 7 years old and alone in the world. Of course she would assume Charles' identity. By the age of 19, when she had finished her years of acting the page and squire, the accolade took place as scheduled. Sir Charles, she was. Only her childhood friend, Thomas, a fellow knight, knew the true "Charles."

In the end, the inevitable happened, as it always does in tales. Months after Thomas and "Charles" attested their love for one another, the bump in the knight could not be hidden and her true identity was revealed.


[Yeah, yeah, yeah. I know. Go read about some true "bumps in the night" over at Sunday Scribblings.]

12 comments:

Shelly Quade said...

It felt kind of half-hearted - but it was written on the spur of the moment, so that's okay.

I liked the pun, personally. I liked the short fairy tale feel.

I think if you revised this, gave a little bit more detail, or maybe made it a little bit ridiculous, so that it had a sort of Rocky & Bullwinkle sketch feel to it, it could be great. If you want to, that is...

Ofira Sephiroth said...

Interesting story. I wasn't expecting the ending at all.

anthonynorth said...

A great bit of fun at the end.

Belle said...

LOL... Some bumps in the night are harder to hide than others. I liked the "snicker" effect at the end! Too funny.

WrightStuff said...

Oh I loved that... laughed out loud, just wasn't expecting it. Very entertaining!!

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

What a great twist! And you were commenting about how *I'd* twisted the prompt; you beat me a million times over!

keiths ramblings said...

I wasn't expecting that! A great read.

oldegg said...

I really loved this piece. She so much wanted to be a knight but will find that being a mum is just as rewarding.

gel said...

Hey, I enjoyed the pun. (I'm an incurable punster.) Also, the fairytale quality. Such a different approach to the prompt. Thanks!

Lilibeth said...

ugggh. I hate it when I don't see the pun coming. Good work.

gautami tripathy said...

I love puns. I enjoyed this.

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Dee Martin said...

all kinds of off color jokes came into my mind but that is where they are staying :)
made me chuckle!

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